The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data illustrate the figure of trips made by kids in one country in the years 1990 and 2010 to go from
school
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to
it
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another
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again using various transportation methods.
Overall
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, the highest way to travel to
school
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in 2010 was by car passenger, whilst, the number of children who went to
school
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by car
were
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was
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the lowest amount in 1990, walking to
school
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was a common method in 1990,
however
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in 2010 going to
school
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by bicycle was the minimum method. Looking more closely at the data car passenger and walking have the topmost numbers, children went to
school
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by cars was the very highest figure in 2010 it was just over 12
million
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, but in 1990 it was just over 4
million
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, walking
on the other hand
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was uppermost in 1990 with approximately 12.5
million
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subsequently
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dropped by the year 2010 with about six
million
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. The remaining three methods are walking and
bus
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cycling and
bus
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, the majority of walking and
bus
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was very high in 1990. With just under six
million
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but
it's
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it
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fall
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fell
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to around 3
million
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in 2010, cycling was up way to go to
school
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in 1990 with more than 6
million
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and it became about two
million
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in 2010,
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finally
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finally,
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children went to
school
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by
bus
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were and still a high method and it reminded around the same number.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, million, bus with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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