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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should The Relationship Between Age and Crime, last year Types of Property Crime in the UK, last year

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should The Relationship Between Age and Crime, last year Types of Property Crime in the UK, last year
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The two diagrams give the details about illegal
acts
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 in the UK for the previous year. The line chart shows the number of crimes committed with respect to
age
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,
while
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 the pie diagram illustrates a variety of crimes.
Overall
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, we can see that the majority of unlawful
acts
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 are violent and are executed more by people of younger
age
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. It is interesting to note that criminal
acts
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 started rather early, after the
age
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 of 8. The number of
such
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acts
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 kept increasing rapidly with
age
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 until it peaked at 800,000 felonies carried out by the
age
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 group of 20.
Thereafter
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, the figure fell dramatically by 75% at 28 after which the rate slowly declined. At 60, the crime rate was below 100,000. Regarding the kinds of illegal
acts
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, almost half of it comprised of violent ones,
whereas
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 offences, like theft and burglary, and illicit drug trade share a similar number, 23% and 22% respectively. Only 9% represented public order crimes.
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