The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billioin) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catagories, from 1995-2002. Summarises the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billioin) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catagories, from 1995-2002.

Summarises the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the categories of
phone
calls in
UK
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the UK
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between 1995 and 2002. Throughout the years, local
phone
calls
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call
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numbers were the highest, followed by national and international
phone
calls and
lastly
, mobile
phone
calls were positioned
last
. Calls in regional
area
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areas
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of
UK
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the UK
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through fixed
line
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lines
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were the highest in 1995, at more than 70
billion
minutes. It increased
10
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by 10
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-20
billion
in the span of 4 years, reaching its peak
on
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of
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90
billion
in 1999.
This
number decreased gradually back to 70
billion
in 2002. Different trends were displayed by national and international calls and mobile calls. Both categories
were
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increased consistently each year.
While
the
national
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number of national
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and international calls number rose slowly -- less than 10% each year -- the
calls
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number of calls
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made through mobile
phone
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phones
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increased dramatically, reaching
quadruple
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a quadruple
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in 2002 compared to less than 10
billion
in 1995. But even though the
last
two categories have increasing patterns, their highest points remained lower than the local
phone
calls
in
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at
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its lowest point.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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