You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The charts illustrate the
arrested
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arrest
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rate among two genders,
men
and
women
, in the five years ending 1994 and the latest causes for
jailed
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jail
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.
Overall
, it is evident that most of
prisoners
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the prisoners
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in
five
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the five
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years ending 1994
was
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were
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mostly males, and the main reason to be arrested for both sexes
is
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was
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public drinking.
To begin
with, the pie chart showed that males and females have a significant difference in the number of custodial sentences in five years ending 1994. There was 32% of males got jailed and the rest of the percentage was freed, which was 68%.
Whereas
, it was only 9% of females who got arrested and there was 91% of free females. Moving to the bar chart, most of the
prisoners
is
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are
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convicted
by
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of
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drinking in a public space, amounting to around 31% and 37% for
men
and
women
, respectively.
Following
this
, around 25% of
men
prisoners
are objected to
drink
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while
driving and nearly 20% of
women
prisoners
punished because of
doing
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assault and other reasons.
Then
, the arrested
men
have similar percentages to approximately 15% by doing breach of order, assault, theft, and other reasons. Meanwhile,
women
who breach
of
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apply
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order
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orders
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and
stealing
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steal
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are about 13%. Both of the genders who do not have
answer
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answers
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have the least share, accounting for below 10% of all the reasons.
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