First some people think that it is responsibilities of governments to take care of the environment while other believe that it is responsibility of the citizens discuss both views and give your opinion

There is an ongoing discussion
between
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people where taking
care
of the
environment
is
government's
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the government's
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responsibility; meanwhile, others argue that the
citizens
should be more responsible
to preserve
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for preserving
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the
environment
. I argue that
this
action should be done by both parties. On the one hand, the
government
has bigger authority to take
care
the
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environment
than
individual
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individuals
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in terms of amount of budget and policy implementation. The
government
usually gets tax revenue from
citizens
and they can allocate some to do something for the
environment
.
Moreover
, the budget utilisation can be combined with the implementation of appropriate policy related to
sustainable
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a sustainable
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environment
.
Therefore
, they can
do
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take
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more comprehensive actions than their
citizens
.
For example
, the
government
can implement a policy for determining
minimum
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the minimum
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of public areas that should be covered by parks or forests and
then
they can allocate some of their budgets to plant new trees as well.
On the other hand
, some believe that taking
care
of the
environment
is likely to
the
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citizen's responsibility because they
also
enjoy the impact of
this
action.
Therefore
, they should start to do particular actions,
eventhough
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even though
in
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on
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small
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a small
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scale, to contribute to
maintain
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the
environment
. Taking
care
of their ecosystem can be started by changing their behaviour;
for example
, allocating some areas of their private house for planting some plants or trees. If
this
action can be implemented massively, it will have a huge contribution to
improve
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air
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the air
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quality of their cities. In conclusion, taking
care
of the
environment
can be done by both the
government
and the
citizens
because all stakeholders play an important role
to preserve
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in preserving
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the
environment
.
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task response
Your essay provides a complete response to the prompt by discussing both views and giving your opinion. However, it could be further improved by strengthening the argument and using more varied examples.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to consistently use connecting phrases to ensure that the essay flows smoothly. Some transitions seem a bit abrupt.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly states the topic and your opinion, which sets a good foundation for your essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-structured with clear paragraphs, making it easy to follow your argument.
task response
Good usage of examples and explanations to support your main points, particularly mentioning government policies and individual actions.

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  • environmental policies
  • sustainable practices
  • legislation
  • regulation
  • green technologies
  • recycling
  • energy consumption
  • grassroots movements
  • framework
  • incentives
  • conservation efforts
  • significantly
  • collective
  • facilitate
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