The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural/and becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural/and becomes

less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of

the world during the 1990s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart explains several reasons
of
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unproductive
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the unproductive
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issue
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issues
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in
agricultural
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the agricultural
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sector
while
the table elaborates how these causes affected three regions during
1990s
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.
Overall
, there are three main causes of
land
degradation which had the biggest
impact
on Europe's
land
. Looking at the table,
over grazing
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became the main cause of
degradated
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degraded
degradation
land
with more than a third. The main cause was followed by deforestation and
over cultivation
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,
with
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contributing
for
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almost 60% combined.
Moreover
, if looking
the
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detail in some regions, Europe had the biggest
impact
on unproductive
land
with almost a quarter of their
land
. The root cause of
this
issue in Europe was mainly
due to
deforestation, contributing
for
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almost 10%.
Then
, the second largest
impact
of degraded
land
was
oceania
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with 13% of their
land
was
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least
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the least
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productive. They mainly had an issue with
over grazing
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overgrazing
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but had no problem with
over cultivation
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over-cultivation
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.
Lastly
, the region which had the least
impact
was
the
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North America with merely 5% of their
land
was
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not productive.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words land, impact with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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