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The chart below gives information about how people aged 25 - 34 are housed in the UK. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting on the features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how people aged 25 - 34 are housed in the UK. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting on the features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The bar graph provides us the information about the housing status of
people
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 between the ages of 25 to 34 in the UK.
Overall
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,
It is clear that
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 there has been a decline in homeowners through the years and it is the other way around for
people
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 who rent their homes. During the year 2004, there was a huge difference in terms of percentage between homeowners and renters where slightly less than 60 per cent of the
people
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 owned their own homes
while
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 around 20 per cent of
people
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 were renting their stay in the same year.
This
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 home-owning trend continued to decline with a marginal increase in 2007 and
further
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 started to decline.It was in the years 2010 and 2011 when the percentage was holding steadily and started to fall back again.
On the other hand
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, the number of
people
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 who were paying rent continued to grow substantially through the years surpassing the percentage of homeowners in 2013.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homeownership
  • renting
  • mortgage
  • down payment
  • property market
  • housing affordability
  • economic downturn
  • government incentives
  • interest rates
  • demographic shift
  • real estate
  • first-time buyers
  • market trends
  • property prices
  • financial stability
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