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the pictures show how tomato ketchup is made. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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Introduction
The photos illustrate how tomato
ketchup
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 is produced. There are 15 stages in
diagram
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the diagram
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 , from picking
tomatoes
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 from bushes , to
enjoy
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enjoying
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ketchup
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 on your food.
Body paragraph 1
In
first
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the first
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stage
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stage,
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 the
tomatoes
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 are picked , and
then
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 they are sorted into
tow
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two
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 groups
of
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apply
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good and bad. After
that
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that,
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 they are sent to
factory
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the factory
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 by truck to start processes on them .
Body paragraph 2
Once the
tomatoes
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are arrived
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arrive
have arrived
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to
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at
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factory
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the factory
a factory
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 , they are
then
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 started to remove
skin
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the skin
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, stalk and seeds
from
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apply
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it
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apply
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.
Next
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Next,
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 the
tomatoes
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 are put into big
containers
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 , which they are crushed in
it
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apply
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.after adding sugar,
winegar
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vinegar
Winegar
 and salt to
containers
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 , they are started boiling by fire flames. When the paste is left for
tow
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two
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 hours to be cold , it is
then
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 put into
sauce
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containers
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.
Conclusion
In order to use
ketchup
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sauce
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 ,
sauce
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containers
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 are
labeled
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labelled
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 and quality controlled .
next
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next,
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 they are put into boxes and are transferred to
supermarket
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the supermarket
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.
Subsequently
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 , by buying a
ketchup
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sauce
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 you can enjoy it on your
humburger
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hamburger
 and fries.

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grammar
Try to maintain consistent tense throughout your essay. There are inconsistencies like 'they are started to remove' which should be 'they start to remove'.
coherence
Use more varied sentence structures to make your essay more engaging. Instead of starting multiple sentences with 'next' or 'then', try different phrases such as 'following that', 'afterwards', 'subsequently'.
grammar
Ensure that all verbs are appropriately conjugated. For example, 'the paste is left for two hours to be cold' should be 'the paste is left for two hours to cool down'.
task response
The essay provides a clear overview of the process with an appropriate step-by-step description.
coherence
The sequencing of steps is logical and easy to follow, which makes the process understandable.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • washing
  • contaminants
  • crushing
  • extract
  • pulp
  • cooking
  • mixture
  • straining
  • seeds
  • skins
  • bottling
  • sterilized
  • labeling
  • packaging
  • distribution
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