the maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now,and plans for its development. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comaprisons where relevant.

the maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now,and plans for its development.

summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comaprisons where relevant.
The
maps
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illustrates an area
which
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called Islip, in present and a
plan
of
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its development in future.
Overall
, the
town
centre will be modernized and a new dual
cariageway
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carriageway
roadwill
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road will
roadkill
surround the
town
. Looking at the current , there is no bus station , shopping centre and car
aprk
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park
which in new
plan
there will be replaced with shops and
main
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road will be converted to
pedestrian
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the pedestrian
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. The park which
in
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is
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located in
south-east
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the south-east
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, will be
got
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smaller and
school
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the school
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will be the
sameas
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same as
it is. In future
plan
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new housing is going to be constructed near the park and north-east of the
town
.other housing areas will
be remained
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remain
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with no changes.now there is only a main road and
tow
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two
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oneway roads to park and school which in the new
plan
there will be a big dual carriageway that connects west to east with
tow
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two
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way
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ways
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from north and south of the
town
.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words plan, town with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • current infrastructure
  • future development plans
  • transformation
  • residential areas
  • commercial zones
  • shopping centres
  • bus stations
  • parking facilities
  • green spaces
  • placements
  • compare
  • contrast
  • expansion
  • restructuring
  • modernization
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