the graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

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three museums, over a

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rise in the

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National-China

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and MET-New York

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decreased

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the most

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visitors

than others. Looking at the details, as regards MET

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in 2001,

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rise in the next four

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fell gradually

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between 2000 to 2003. After that despite falling gradually to 6

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, the figure

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the graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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