the graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

the graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005.

summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.
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The
barchart
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bar chart
illustration about how many people
visite
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visited
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three museums, over a
five
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five-year
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years
period between 2000 and 2005.
Overall
, it can be seen
steadily
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rise in the
visitors
of
National-China
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and MET-New York
museum
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over the period in
the
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question,
while
the visitor of Edo-Tokyo
have
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decreased
Between
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over five
years
. Another interesting point is that
Edo
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the Edo
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museum
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have
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the most
visitors
in 2000, but in 2005 National
museum
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have
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had
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more
visitors
than others. Looking at the details, as regards MET
visitors
halved to 6
millions
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million
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in 2001,
then
there was a
steadily
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steady
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rise in the next four
years
. If we look at
National
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the National
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museum
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the figure
was rise
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rose
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steadily
between
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over
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five
years
over the period in question.
By
contrast
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the
visitors
of
Edo
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to Edo
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fell gradually
6
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by 6
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millions
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million
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visitors
between 2000 to 2003. After that despite falling gradually to 6
millions
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million
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, the figure
then
leveled off between 2003 to 2005.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, visitors, museum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of visitors
  • museum
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • the period between 2000 and 2005
  • decline
  • rise
  • comparatively
  • sharp
  • slight
  • notable
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