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Band 4.5

The following maps show some of the changes that have taken place in Dubai in recent decades. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The following maps
demonstrates
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that
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the
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 many enormous changes that have occurred in Dubai in recent years. In the
past
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although
 there were few buildings and
skyscraper
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skyscrapers
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furthermore
 the area had just many ambushes at the edge of the road and the remaining area
just
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was just
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 covered by sand.
However
, these days modern and
amuse
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 buildings
was
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were
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 built in Dubai
in addition
, some
villa
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villas
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 and flat
apartment
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apartments
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 were knocked down.
Due to
this
 reason and
increasing
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of
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population present-day picture illustrates that many vehicles and cars
are exist
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in
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on
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 the roads and motorways in comparison with
past
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the past
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.
In
contrast
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 the clock tower roundabout is similar to
past
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the past
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 and just developed with some trees.
In
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Overall
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overall
 the city has developed significantly over the
last
 decades.
This
 renovation and development
are
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have
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 caused
that
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apply
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the sand can’t be seen anymore and everything
covered
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is covered
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 with skyscrapers and buildings. And Dubai is going to be an advanced city.
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