The graph shows average annual percentages of online adults who use different social networks. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows the usage of websites among adults over a
two year
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two-year
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period from 2014 to 2016.
Moreover
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In 2014, the most popular option was using one site, attracting approximately 36% of users. The categories for no
sites
and two
sites
were close, each hovering around 22% to 23%.
overmore
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Moreover
, five
sites
had the lowest change , with only about 2% of adults showing.
Furthermore
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By 2015, there
was
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a
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noticeable changes in the graph The number of users engaging with three
sites
increased to around 8%,
while
four
sites
saw a rise to about 4%.
However
, there was a significant decline in the use of
one site
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one-site
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Overally
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Overall
, one site and no
sites
were the most consistently popular choices across both years,
while
five
sites
remained the least utilized option. There was a slight upward trend in the interest for using three and four
sites
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sites with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average annual percentage
  • online adults
  • social networks
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • highest/lowest
  • discernible trends
  • consistent growth/decline
  • popularity
  • competition
  • functionality
  • significant changes
  • patterns
  • spike/drop in usage
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