The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the pattern of
movies
chosen by different age groups of people in cinema between 2000 and 2015. It is noteworthy that the number
of movies
watched by the young adult group
increased year
by year
, while
the movies
seen by older groups decreased.
The Correct quantifier usage
number of movies
number
of movies
picked by the youngest group
of people, which is consist
of young Change the verb form
consists
adult
in their 18-24 years, was significantly increased. In 2000, it was at 10 Fix the agreement mistake
adults
movies
per year
,
and gradually rose to 12 in 2005, remained static in 2010, and reached a peak of 14 Remove the comma
apply
movies
in 2015.
Showing the opposite trends, the number
of movies
watched by the the
Remove the redundancy
apply
group
aged 25 to 44 years old was
decreased steeply from 12 Unnecessary verb
apply
movies
annually to 10 and 7 in 2005 and 2010, respectively. At the end
of the period, it hit the lowest point of 5 movies
. The number
of movies
selected by the third age group
(45-65 years old) was
Unnecessary verb
apply
also
showed a declination
yearly. It was at the highest Replace the word
decline
number
in 2000, accounting for 15 movies
each year
. It reduced by only 1 in 2005, continued to decrease to 12 in 2010, and finally
crashed to only 8 movies
in the last
period.Submitted by sheillarachmania12 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words movies, number, group, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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