The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the pattern of
movies
chosen by different age groups of people in cinema between 2000 and 2015. It is noteworthy that the Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
movies
watched by the young adult Use synonyms
group
increased Use synonyms
year
by Use synonyms
year
, Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
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movies
seen by older groups decreased.
The Correct quantifier usage
number of movies
number
of Use synonyms
movies
picked by the youngest Use synonyms
group
of people, which Use synonyms
is consist
of young Change the verb form
consists
adult
in their 18-24 years, was significantly increased. In 2000, it was at 10 Fix the agreement mistake
adults
movies
per Use synonyms
year
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,
and gradually rose to 12 in 2005, remained static in 2010, and reached a peak of 14 Remove the comma
apply
movies
in 2015.
Showing the opposite trends, the Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
movies
watched by the Use synonyms
the
Remove the redundancy
apply
group
aged 25 to 44 years old Use synonyms
was
decreased steeply from 12 Unnecessary verb
apply
movies
annually to 10 and 7 in 2005 and 2010, respectively. Use synonyms
At the end
of the period, it hit the lowest point of 5 Linking Words
movies
. The Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
movies
selected by the third age Use synonyms
group
(45-65 years old) Use synonyms
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
also
showed a Linking Words
declination
yearly. It was at the highest Replace the word
decline
number
in 2000, accounting for 15 Use synonyms
movies
each Use synonyms
year
. It reduced by only 1 in 2005, continued to decrease to 12 in 2010, and Use synonyms
finally
crashed to only 8 Linking Words
movies
in the Use synonyms
last
period.Linking Words
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words movies, number, group, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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