The tow maps illustrate the internal changes that occurred to the layout and the functions of the facilities in a library from 2002 until the present day.

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The maps describe the development of the library in the layout and the functions of the

infrastructures

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infrastructure

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between 2002 and now.

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it is clear that

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the

bigges

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biggest

change is

that

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apply

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the removal of

facilites

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facilities

in the east and

addition

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the addition

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new

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of new

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faciliites

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facilities

. Noticeably, there is an entrance still

remained

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in the south. Looking at the maps more closely, we can see that the entertainment area in the northwest has been removed, and replaced by children's area, which consists of two sofas, storytelling events and children's fiction

books

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. The

elemination

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elimination

of children's book area and adult non-fiction

books

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and

equiry

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enquiry

inquiry

desk

have

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been done.

Also

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there a lecture

rooma

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room

and cafe

are

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apply

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have been added in the northeast and southeast respectively. All

adults

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fiction

book

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books

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has

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have

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been moved to the east and an information desk and

self- service

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self-service

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machines

also

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have been installed in the east. The computer room , which has taken

place

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the place

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reading

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the reading

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room, was located in the southwest.

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, all reference

books

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was

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put in the west, where

was

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the adult fiction

books

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, there

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entrance constructed in the south and still there.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

187 words

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The tow maps illustrate the internal changes that occurred to the layout and the functions of the facilities in a library from 2002 until the present day.

Nowadays, some employers think that formal academic qualifications are more important than life experience or personal qualities when they look for new employees. Why is it the case? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable clothes. Thebefore, all students have to wear school uniforms. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Shopping should be perceived as a form of self-indulgence rather than about buying things that are necessary. Do you agree or disagree?

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory in high school programmes (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?