The tow maps illustrate the internal changes that occurred to the layout and the functions of the facilities in a library from 2002 until the present day.

The tow maps illustrate the internal changes that occurred to the layout and the functions of the facilities in a library from 2002 until the present day.
The maps describe the development of the library in the layout and the functions of the
infrastructures
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between 2002 and now.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
bigges
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biggest
change is
that
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the removal of
facilites
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facilities
in the east and
addition
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the addition
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new
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faciliites
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facilities
. Noticeably, there is an entrance still
remained
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in the south. Looking at the maps more closely, we can see that the entertainment area in the northwest has been removed, and replaced by children's area, which consists of two sofas, storytelling events and children's fiction
books
. The
elemination
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elimination
of children's book area and adult non-fiction
books
and
equiry
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enquiry
inquiry
desk
have
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been done.
Also
there a lecture
rooma
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room
and cafe
are
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have been added in the northeast and southeast respectively. All
adults
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fiction
book
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books
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has
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been moved to the east and an information desk and
self- service
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machines
also
have been installed in the east. The computer room , which has taken
place
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the place
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of
reading
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the reading
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room, was located in the southwest.
Moreover
, all reference
books
was
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put in the west, where
was
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were
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the adult fiction
books
.
Finally
, there
an
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entrance constructed in the south and still there.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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