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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the capacity of
people
 aged 65 and over from 1940 to 20240 in three
differenct
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different
countries
such
 as Japan, Sweden and
USA
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the USA
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. In 1940,
USA
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the USA
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was
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had
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 the highest population among
three
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the three
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countries
which
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with
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 approximately 9% . It experienced a slight increase in 196 about 10%
then
 it rose drastically until 1980
around
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to around
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 15%. From 1985 to 2019 the American
people
 drop slightly under 15%. In the following year, it climbed dramatically around 23% which reached a pick
in
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at
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 the end of
decade
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.
Initially
, Swedish roughly 8%
then
 experienced a small boost in 196 which about 7%
then
 it rose modestly until 14% in 1980. In the following year, it had a little decrease until 1985. Afterward, the population experienced a sharp increase between 1985 and 2018
then
 had a small fall until 2025. It touched the highest point about 25% in 2040. Japan, which
was
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 the lowest capacity of
people
 in 1940 around 5%
then
 touched the bottom in 1960. It experienced the number of
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 from 1960 to 1985
then
 rose sharply between 1985 and 2040
which
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hit
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hitting
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the
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an
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 apex above 25% and
became
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becoming
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the
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 huge community of
people
 among the other
countries
.
Overall
, during the one century, Japan became the biggest human
beings
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being
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 between two other
countries
. Meanwhile, American
people
 from the top in the
begining
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beginning
then
 became the lowest
in
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at
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 the end of
decade
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the decade
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • elderly
  • significant increase
  • surpass
  • gradual increase
  • crucial period
  • rapid increase
  • healthcare advancements
  • lower birth rates
  • projections
  • adjustments in social services
  • demographic dynamics
  • lifestyle choices
  • trends
  • notable
  • potentially
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