Government should spend money on railway rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or diasgree with this statement?

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Today, many people believe that the government should focus more and take

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on maintaining and constructing railways

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of roads. Personally, I disagree with

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statement because both

road

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and

railway

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services are equally important.

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trains

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are the most popular mode of

transportation

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supplies and

capable

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of carrying crowds efficiently.

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, building materials and office employees are mostly transported via

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the

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apply

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railway

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tracks are more durable than roads and significantly reduce or diminish accidental rates.

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, the cost of maintenance and risk of lives are minimized to a considerable extent and proved by the survey of Social Development authority through deep analysis.

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railway

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transportation

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is inexpensive and reduces daily commuting time as

railway

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transportation

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is traffic-free and quick.

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, people will have to use separate times to book tickets and schedule their work

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the train time.

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causes an imbalance in work life.

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road

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transportation

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such

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as taxis,cars and buses are more convenient and comfortable.

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, individuals are unable to reach the doorstep

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trains

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whereas

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personal vehicles or buses are able to and provide luxurious seating with more privacy and comfort. At the same time,

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transportation

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generates a greater income

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the government through tickets and taxes compared to

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and

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will lead to a skyrocketed economy which contributes to

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poor infrastructure facilities like health care and education. In conclusion, even though

railway

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transportation

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supports transporting

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apply

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supplies,

reduce

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reduces

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maintenance

cost

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costs

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and

increase

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increases

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security rates

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however

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, money should be spent

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road

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transportation

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too

due to

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its greater revenue gained , convenience and comfortability.

Submitted by Witharana Senesh Rasinda Wickramasinghe on Mon Sep 23 2024

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task achievement

Ensure that you thoroughly address both aspects of the topic: the importance of railway and road services. While the essay touches on both, it leans slightly more towards the advantages of railway services without equally discussing the importance of road services.

coherence/cohesion

Avoid small grammatical errors and improve sentence variety. For example, use transitional phrases more often to connect your ideas smoothly (e.g., 'Moreover,' 'In addition,' 'However,' etc.).

task achievement

Your arguments are relevant and supported with specific examples, which strengthens your essay.

coherence/cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are clearly present and effectively outline and summarize your position.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

275 words

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