Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices would help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The problem of pollution caused by vehicles has become a rising concern for authorities. Whether funding to improve transport infrastructure and minimizing bus fares would be
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friendly approach is
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question of debate.
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statement as these suggestions seem quite efficient to
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the more use of public shuttle service. To commence with, investing in existing malfunctioned commuting
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enhancing the convenience and comfort of the journey in
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automobiles or electric vehicles which are the most eco-friendly approaches to cope with rising air pollution in modern times. A recent study has shown that electric vehicles
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in China
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lessened
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carbon emissions by 40% in a few years.
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, widened paths and
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separate
routes, allocated specifically to share mobility, are required
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repairing the
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existing
potholes and improving the main roads.
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in ticket prices seems a reasonable approach
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encouraging more frequent usage of mass transit. More people will tend to avail
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services as private cars prove too costly to commute
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regions.
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government has
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increased the use of public conveyance by reducing its fares in an effort to deal with carbon
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reduction. To summarise, upgrading
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transport system and making these services readily accessible within a reasonable amount are the most productive strategies to tackle
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issue of transport pollution. In my view, taxation on private cars and making driving
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compulsory for car owners can
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help in
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regard.
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The essay effectively addresses both sides of the issue, providing a balanced view on the topic.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable transport
  • carbon footprint
  • mass transit
  • subsidization
  • fare reduction
  • environmental impact
  • urban planning
  • public policy
  • commuter behavior
  • infrastructural development
  • economic efficiency
  • equitable access
  • lifestyle shift
  • congestion
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