Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices would help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
The problem of pollution caused by vehicles has become a rising concern for authorities. Whether funding to improve transport infrastructure and minimizing bus fares would be
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an environmental
environmental
friendly approach is Change the word
environmentally
the
question of debate. Correct article usage
a
This
essay agrees with this
statement as these suggestions seem quite efficient to ecnourage
the more use of public shuttle service.
To commence with, investing in existing malfunctioned commuting Correct your spelling
encourage
involve
enhancing the convenience and comfort of the journey in Correct subject-verb agreement
involves
following
ways. Correct article usage
the following
Firstly
, government
should spend Add an article
the government
handsome
amount Correct article usage
a handsome
in
introducing Change preposition
on
biofuel operated
automobiles or electric vehicles which are the most eco-friendly approaches to cope with rising air pollution in modern times. A recent study has shown that electric vehicles Add a hyphen
biofuel-operated
EVs
in China Correct word choice
and EVs
has
lessened Correct subject-verb agreement
have
the
carbon emissions by 40% in a few years. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, widened paths and seperate
routes, allocated specifically to share mobility, are required Correct your spelling
separate
along with
repairing the exisiting
potholes and improving the main roads.
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existing
In addition
, decrease
in ticket prices seems a reasonable approach Correct article usage
a decrease
in
encouraging more frequent usage of mass transit. More people will tend to avail Change preposition
to
these
services as private cars prove too costly to commute Change preposition
of these
far-flung
regions. Change preposition
to far-flung
For instance
, UK
government has Correct article usage
the UK
succesfully
increased the use of public conveyance by reducing its fares in an effort to deal with carbon Correct your spelling
successfully
emissions'
reduction.
To summarise, upgrading Change noun form
emissions
communal
transport system and making these services readily accessible within a reasonable amount are the most productive strategies to tackle Correct article usage
the communal
this
issue of transport pollution. In my view, taxation on private cars and making driving license
compulsory for car owners can Fix the agreement mistake
licenses
also
help in this
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Work on sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity. There are a few awkwardly phrased sentences and minor grammatical mistakes that slightly impede readability.
content
Develop and support main points more thoroughly. Adding more specific examples or elaborating on the ones given would strengthen the essay.
structure
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content
The essay effectively addresses both sides of the issue, providing a balanced view on the topic.
examples
Good use of specific examples, such as the example of electric vehicles in China and public conveyance in the UK, which support the main points effectively.
structure
The essay has clearly defined paragraphs, making it easy to follow the argument.
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