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The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line graph illustrates the significant variations in
car
production
 among three countries over the period of seven years, from 2003 to 2009.
Overall
,
car
production
 increased substantially in
Thailand
 and
Australia
,
while
 Argentina saw a continuous downward trend.
Besides
,
Thailand
 emerged as the leading
car
 producer by 2009, followed closely by
Australia
,
whereas
 Argentina consistently lagged behind
through
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 the whole years surveyed. Commencing with the year
of
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2003,
Thailand
 produced 400
cars
, the highest among the three countries,
while
Australia
 manufactured 300
cars
, and Argentina produced 161
cars
. By 2005,
Thailand
’s
production
 rose sharply to 600
cars
, and
Australia
’s output
also
 increased to 400
cars
.
In contrast
, Argentina’s
car
production
 fell to 200
cars
 during the same period. From 2005 to 2009,
Thailand
 and
Australia
 continued to see impressive growth.
Thailand
’s
production
 skyrocketed to 1,119
cars
, making it the top producer by 2009.
Australia
 followed a similar upward trend, reaching 999
cars
. Meanwhile, Argentina’s
car
production
 continued its downward trajectory, ending at just 100
cars
 in 2009, reflecting a steady decrease throughout the years.
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