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The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the significant variations in
car
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production
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 among three countries over the period of seven years, from 2003 to 2009.
Overall
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,
car
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production
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 increased substantially in
Thailand
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 and
Australia
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,
while
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 Argentina saw a continuous downward trend.
Besides
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,
Thailand
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 emerged as the leading
car
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 producer by 2009, followed closely by
Australia
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,
whereas
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 Argentina consistently lagged behind
through
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 the whole years surveyed. Commencing with the year
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2003,
Thailand
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 produced 400
cars
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, the highest among the three countries,
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Australia
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 manufactured 300
cars
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, and Argentina produced 161
cars
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. By 2005,
Thailand
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’s
production
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 rose sharply to 600
cars
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, and
Australia
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’s output
also
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 increased to 400
cars
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.
In contrast
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, Argentina’s
car
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production
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 fell to 200
cars
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 during the same period. From 2005 to 2009,
Thailand
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 and
Australia
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 continued to see impressive growth.
Thailand
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’s
production
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 skyrocketed to 1,119
cars
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, making it the top producer by 2009.
Australia
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 followed a similar upward trend, reaching 999
cars
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. Meanwhile, Argentina’s
car
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production
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 continued its downward trajectory, ending at just 100
cars
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 in 2009, reflecting a steady decrease throughout the years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, production, thailand, australia, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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