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Some people preferred to read e-books rather than paper books. What are the advantages and disadvatanges?

#people #e-books #paper #books #disadvatanges
Some individuals see a good side of using
e-books
 rather than paper books and some
are
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 not because
e-books
provides
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provide
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convenient
conveniet
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convenience
 and it's less expensive to readers, and the negative side
it
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apply
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is harmful to our
eyes
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eye's
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 health One of the advantages of using
e-books
 it's more
conveniet
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convenient
 to use because you can have
an
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apply
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access to
it
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them
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 wherever you are or
anytime
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 of the day. And, it is easy to get a copy of your
favorite
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favourite
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 books online rather than looking to each bookstore for the availability and you will
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be alloted
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alloted
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allotted
 a lot of time to look each
bookshelves
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bookshelf
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 for it.
For example
, I have
a books
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a book
books
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 that I am interested in
however
 it was not available to any bookstore here in my country but because of
e-books
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e-books,
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 I was able to get a copy online.
Moreover
,
e-books
 are less expensive because of less manufacturer cost like printing and publishing. One of the major disadvantages of
e-books
 is not healthy
to
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 our
eyes
 because of the radiation from our devices. There are some studies that using too much of gadgets can strain our
eyes
 because our
eyes
 will
custom
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be custom
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 to the size of the text.
For instance
, most
of
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apply
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people now
are wearing
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wear
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 eyeglasses at
the
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a
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 young age because of using too
much
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many
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 gadgets. In conclusion,
e-books
has
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have
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 positive impacts on
people
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people's
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 lives in terms of
conveniet
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convenience
, but it
also
 has drawbacks like eye problems.
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task achievement
To enhance task achievement, try to elaborate more on both the advantages and disadvantages of e-books, providing additional relevant examples to support each point.
coherence cohesion
Focus on improving logical structure by ensuring each paragraph follows a clear topic sentence and supporting details flow naturally.
coherence cohesion
To improve cohesion, use more linking words and phrases to connect your ideas smoothly across sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, summarizing the main points discussed.
task achievement
Good use of specific example to illustrate the convenience of e-books in the first body paragraph.

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