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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
#information #report #energy #consumption #usa #projections #summarise #features #comparisons
The line graph illustrates the report of 2008 in the USA, in which the information
of
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energy
consumption
 by fuel from 1980 to 2030 is given. It
also
 tells the history and projections of
energy
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 in the USA. The
energy
consumption
 through nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower was low in 1980, but with time there are more chances that somehow it will
be
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increase till 2030.
However
, the decline
of
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energy
consumption
 through hydropower has been observed
from
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 2010 and there are
prediction
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predictions
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 that it will continue in 2030 as well.
Furthermore
,
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extraction of 20
quadrillion
units
 of
energy
 from natural gases and 15
quadrillion
units
 from coal was recorded in 1980 and in
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the comming
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comming
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coming
 time
energy
 through coal will surpass
to
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30 Q
units
 and natural gases will be on
same
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 line in 2023.
Moreover
, the most popular
mean
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 of
energy
consumption
 was petrol and oil in 1980, which was about 35
quadrillion
units
. With time it seeks
attention
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 of the authorities of the USA and the projection of
energy
 will cross 50
quadrillion
units
 in
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the comming
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comming
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coming
 years.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, consumption, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • trends
  • marked increase
  • dominant source
  • modest increase
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • nuclear energy
  • noticeable decline
  • span
  • petroleum
  • natural gas
  • coal
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