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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looka today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two map plans illustrate a Porth port that changed
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over 20 years,between 2000 and now.
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 the harbour changed from a rural area to a
tourism
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 place. Several buildings changed for tourists. The car park,Showers and toilets which are located in the north did not change in
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 period. Fishing boats and Marina which was for private yachts changed their places. Docks, which were in the
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northerneast
 and located near public
beach
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beaches
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 constructed.
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,new showers and toilets were built near the car park and Marina. New cafes and shops opened near Lifeboat.
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. The castle,which was in the southern east and didn't use for many years was replaced by a hotel. The public beach changed to a private one for hotel users.
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You have successfully covered the main changes that occurred in the harbour over the 20-year period.
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Your essay identifies key alterations and upgrades aimed at tourism.

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