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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looka today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two map plans illustrate a Porth port that changed
in
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over 20 years,between 2000 and now.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the harbour changed from a rural area to a
tourism
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tourist
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 place. Several buildings changed for tourists. The car park,Showers and toilets which are located in the north did not change in
this
 period. Fishing boats and Marina which was for private yachts changed their places. Docks, which were in the
northern east
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northerneast
 and located near public
beach
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beaches
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 constructed.
Furthermore
,new showers and toilets were built near the car park and Marina. New cafes and shops opened near Lifeboat.
Moreover
. The castle,which was in the southern east and didn't use for many years was replaced by a hotel. The public beach changed to a private one for hotel users.
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You have successfully covered the main changes that occurred in the harbour over the 20-year period.
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Your essay identifies key alterations and upgrades aimed at tourism.

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