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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more prons to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? give reasons for your answers and give relevant examples

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It is argued that some individual prefers
houses
,
while
 others are in favour of living in
appartments
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apartments
. Both have their own advantages and disadvantages. I completely agree with the ideas and will support my opinion in
this
 essay with examples. Nowadays every person
have
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has
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 their own choices.
People
 believe that living in
house
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a house
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have
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has
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 more prons.
Firstly
, it is free of cost .
While
 staying in
houses
 you do not have to stress yourself for paying
rents
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rent
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at the end
 of every month.
Secondly
,
renovation
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the renovation
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 process is easier in homes
then
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than
show examples
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in appartments
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appartments
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apartments
.
People
 can make changes to the walls freely.
Thirdly
, the person can have full privacy which he/she
lackes
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lacks
 in
flats
.
However
,
houses
 have more space in the form of gardens. One can easily enjoy and spend time there. In
flats
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flats,
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 you only have balconies that
dont
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don't
 have any space and privacy.
Moreover
, many
people
 prefer staying in buildings rather
then
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than
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houses
. To
them
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them,
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appartments
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apartments
takes
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take
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 less place and have more security. As
population
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the population
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 is increasing day by day, in order to fit
population
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the population
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 within the country, the governments will choose
flats
 over
houses
 because
it
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they
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takes
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take
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 less space and more
people
 are adjusted in one single building.
Along with
it
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this
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 public
also
 chooses
flats
 because they are near
to
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apply
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shopping malls.
Hence
, it is proven that whether you choose
houses
 or
flats
 to
lives
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live
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, both
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in, both
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 have their own positive and negative points, but
I
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in
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 my opinion housing is better
then
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than
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appartments
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apartments
 because it
have
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has
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 more advantages and is
preffered
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preferred
 by majorty.
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task response
Try to elaborate more on each point and provide more specific examples to support your arguments. This will improve the depth of your response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear and distinct main idea. This will make the essay easier to follow and understand.
coherence cohesion
Be careful with spelling and grammatical errors. Proofreading will help catch mistakes like 'prons' instead of 'pros' and 'appartments' instead of 'apartments'.
task response
You presented a balanced view of both houses and apartments, acknowledging the advantages and disadvantages of each.
task response
You covered a range of points including cost, renovation ease, and privacy for houses, and space efficiency and proximity to amenities for apartments.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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