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the chart below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in australia are currently attending

the chart below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in australia are currently attending
#information #location #dance #classes #people #town #australia
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the pie chart displays
on
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the location of
dance
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classes
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,
while
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give
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 information about
varieties
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dance
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classes
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australian
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Australian
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 youth are currently attending. In summary, the highest
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percentage
 of location of young
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people
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people's
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dance
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clasess
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classes
class
 is in private
studios
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following
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followed
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 by other places and young
people
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 at 11-16 attend
ballet
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class
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classes
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 more than tap and modern
dance
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,
while
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mostly
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most
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people
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 under 11 attend modern
dance
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class
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classes
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 than tap and
ballet
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. The highest percentage of
dance
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classes
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 location is in private
studios
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 at about 48%, respectively, following by school halls at
a
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half of
percentage
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the percentage
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 of private
studios
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 or at 24%.
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, the proportion of
dance
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classes
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 held in community halls and
other
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others
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 at 18%
an
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 the lowest
percetange
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percentage
 at 10% held in
the
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college-based
studios
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. Turning to
another categories
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, the number of
student
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students
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of
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in
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age
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the age
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 group between 11-16 that
attending
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ballet
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the ballet
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 is
at
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600
people
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,
then
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abouth
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about
 450
people
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 attending tap
dance
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class
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, and
for
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300
people
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 join
modern
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dance
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. Meanwhile, the number of
student
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students
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of
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11 years old that
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joining
joininh
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joined
modern
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the modern
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 group is
at
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510
people
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,
then
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 410
people
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attending
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 tap
dance
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class
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and
amd
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and
 300
people
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join
joinh
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joined
ballet
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class
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, people, studios, ballet, class with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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