The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education center in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these courses

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education center in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these courses
The
bar
chart
illustrates the total of males and females participating in different evening classes
while
the pie
chart
depicts the proportion of the
age
groups of the activities at an adult education centre in 2009. It can clearly be seen from the
bar
chart
is all activities, except sculpture, were dominated by
women
. The
bar
chart
shows that people from the
age
of 50 or above were the largest proportion of these courses. The
bar
chart
displays female participation is more than men.
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course was the highest number for
women
with 40 and only 20 men attended. Both painting and drama courses
also
were dominated by
women
.
Conversely
, in the sculpture course, men's attendance was higher than
women
's, with 10 and around 5, respectively. The pie
chart
shows that the highest proportion of
age
groups attending the adult education centre was the
age
group of 50 or higher with 42%
while
individuals between the ages of 40-49 came in second with 26%.
On the other hand
, only 5% of the participants were aged 20 or under.
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