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The graphs below the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The graph illustrates information about the mode of transportation people used in Europe from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
, European citizen were using
bus
, car, bike or foot for their transportation.
However
, in 1960 most
of
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the
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people were using their feet which was just slightly under 35%.
While
bus
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 was in
the
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second place
at
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 the same year by nearly 25%.
On the other hand
,
citizen
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citizens
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 who
using
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 cars were only around 5
percent
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per cent
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. As the years
are
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 going,
cars user
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car users
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is
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still
increasing
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increased
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 from year to year until they
reach
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 their highest peak
on
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 2000 by more than 35%. Regarding people who were using bikes to transport, there was a
slightly
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 decline in proportions from 1960 to 1980 by only 5 percent
while
 it dropped hardly during the period
of
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 1980 until 2000 which reached closely
5
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%. There were fluctuations in the
bus
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number of bus
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 users, at the
begening
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beginning
 there were almost 17% of the European citizen using
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the Bus
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on
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in
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 1960,
then
is
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it
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 increased until it reached
it
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its
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peaked
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on
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 1980, after
that
is
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it
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 suddenly went down to almost 16%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predominance
  • corresponding decline
  • surge
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental awareness
  • resurgence
  • primary modes of transport
  • decades
  • shift in transport modes
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