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The graphs below the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graphs below the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph illustrates information about the mode of transportation people used in Europe from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
, European citizen were using
bus
, car, bike or foot for their transportation.
However
, in 1960 most
of
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the
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people were using their feet which was just slightly under 35%.
While
bus
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 was in
the
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second place
at
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 the same year by nearly 25%.
On the other hand
,
citizen
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citizens
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 who
using
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 cars were only around 5
percent
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. As the years
are
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 going,
cars user
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is
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still
increasing
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 from year to year until they
reach
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 their highest peak
on
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 2000 by more than 35%. Regarding people who were using bikes to transport, there was a
slightly
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 decline in proportions from 1960 to 1980 by only 5 percent
while
 it dropped hardly during the period
of
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 1980 until 2000 which reached closely
5
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%. There were fluctuations in the
bus
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number of bus
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 users, at the
begening
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beginning
 there were almost 17% of the European citizen using
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on
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 1960,
then
is
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it
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 increased until it reached
it
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its
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peaked
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peak
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on
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 1980, after
that
is
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it
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 suddenly went down to almost 16%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predominance
  • corresponding decline
  • surge
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental awareness
  • resurgence
  • primary modes of transport
  • decades
  • shift in transport modes
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