Some people believe that those moving to abroad should try to adopt themselves to the new cultures while others think there is no need to do so. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

Certain individuals think that
move
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to
new
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a new
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place and
adopt
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adopting
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the
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a
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new
cultures
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culture
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should be tried
by
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apply
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themselves
while
others
are disagree
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disagree
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.
While
relocate
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relocating
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and
adopt
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adopting
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the new
culature
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culture
is
fastest
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the fastest
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way to acceptance in the community and it helps to build strong relationships with neighbours and
locals
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local
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society. I believe that
this
is
a
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apply
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good for
immigrant
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immigrants
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who are willing to migrate from
thier
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their
own
country
to different nations. On the one hand, when
the
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a
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person migate from one place to
anohter
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another
place it is very difficult to understand language and culture but
by
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apply
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adoptioting
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adopting
local customs and societal norms can help to indulge
into
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in
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the
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apply
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society.
This
is because they can communicate with
neagihbours
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neighbours
if they know the
lunguages
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languages
language
and
cultures
and it helps to make friends in different nations and it
shown
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shows
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an appreciation and willingness to understand and
participatite
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participate
participating
in the local event.
For example
,
Indian
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an Indian
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citizen
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citizens
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who went to Canada
they
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apply
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are
celibrating
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celebrating
hallowen
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Halloween
and
adopt
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adopting
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the new environment that makes life easy in that
country
.
However
,
i
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I
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would argue that it
shown
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shows
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that
emigrate
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an emigrate
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wants to
immigrant
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immigrate
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and he or she gets
appreication
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appreciation
from the
comunity
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community
.
On the other hand
, it is very hard to
reserve
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preserve
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their
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one
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own's identity and cultural
haritage
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heritage
becasue
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because
of
this
maintanining
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maintaining
one's own cultural practices can provide a sense of stability and
confort
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comfort
in an unfamiliar environment.
That is
to say, when these individuals
sattle
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settle
down in different nations they have
moral
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a moral
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responsibility to pass on
an
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their
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own culture to their children.
Furthermore
, a multicultural presence in a foreign
country
can
promte
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promote
diversity and enrich local heritage.
For instance
,
a
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apply
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diverse
cultures
in Canada provide new
prosperty
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prosperity
property
those come to different
country
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countries
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.
Therefore
,
i
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I
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believe that a balanced approach can preserve both
cultures
and
environment
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the environment
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. In conclusion,
although
i
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I
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believe that
multicultural
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a multicultural
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community helps to
integration
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integrate
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and
acceptance
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accept
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in local society. it can provide a sense of stability and comfort
enviornment
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environment
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • integration
  • acceptance
  • community
  • customs
  • language
  • societal norms
  • cultural barriers
  • culture shock
  • heritage
  • identity
  • local way of life
  • multicultural
  • diversity
  • fusion
  • positive cultural exchange
  • unfamiliar environment
  • appreciation
  • respect
  • expat communities
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