Some people believe that those moving to abroad should try to adopt themselves to the new cultures while others think there is no need to do so. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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Certain individuals think that

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new

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a new

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place and

adopt

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new

cultures

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culture

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should be tried

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themselves

while

others

are disagree

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While

relocate

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and

adopt

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the new

culature

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culture

fastest

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way to acceptance in the community and it helps to build strong relationships with neighbours and

locals

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society. I believe that

this

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good for

immigrant

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immigrants

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who are willing to migrate from

thier

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their

own

country

to different nations. On the one hand, when

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person migate from one place to

anohter

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another

place it is very difficult to understand language and culture but

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apply

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adoptioting

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adopting

local customs and societal norms can help to indulge

into

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the

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society.

This

is because they can communicate with

neagihbours

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neighbours

if they know the

lunguages

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languages

language

and

cultures

and it helps to make friends in different nations and it

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an appreciation and willingness to understand and

participatite

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participate

participating

in the local event.

For example

Indian

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an Indian

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citizen

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citizens

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who went to Canada

they

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are

celibrating

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celebrating

hallowen

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Halloween

and

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the new environment that makes life easy in that

country

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would argue that it

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that

emigrate

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an emigrate

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wants to

immigrant

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and he or she gets

appreication

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appreciation

from the

comunity

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community

On the other hand

, it is very hard to

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preserve

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their

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one

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own's identity and cultural

haritage

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heritage

becasue

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because

this

maintanining

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maintaining

one's own cultural practices can provide a sense of stability and

confort

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comfort

in an unfamiliar environment.

That is

to say, when these individuals

sattle

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settle

down in different nations they have

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responsibility to pass on

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own culture to their children.

Furthermore

, a multicultural presence in a foreign

country

can

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promote

diversity and enrich local heritage.

For instance

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diverse

cultures

in Canada provide new

prosperty

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prosperity

property

those come to different

country

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countries

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Therefore

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believe that a balanced approach can preserve both

cultures

and

environment

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the environment

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. In conclusion,

although

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believe that

multicultural

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a multicultural

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community helps to

integration

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integrate

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and

acceptance

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in local society. it can provide a sense of stability and comfort

enviornment

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environment

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

integration
acceptance
community
customs
language
societal norms
cultural barriers
culture shock
heritage
identity
local way of life
multicultural
diversity
fusion
positive cultural exchange
unfamiliar environment
appreciation
respect
expat communities

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