The bar chart compares 7 various factories that utilize ground and public water supply in a country. Data are expressed in millions of cubic meters.

The bar chart compares 7 various factories that utilize ground and public water supply in a country. Data are expressed in millions of cubic meters.
This
chart
illustrates and marks the difference between 7 different companies each making use of public and
groundwater
. A close look at the
chart
reveals that most of these factories have opted for ground over public supply. Namely, chemical factories and metal production take up a large portion of
groundwater
being used in various industries.
In addition
to these two, paper and textile productions utilize
groundwater
eight times more than public supply.
In contrast
to the factories mentioned before, foods/drinks and machinery have more use for public supply water than
groundwater
by a larger margin. Machinery ,
for instance
, utilizes only a mere 10 million cubic meters of
groundwater
as opposed to the hundreds of public
supply
Fix the agreement mistake
supplies
show examples
.
Overall
, the
chart
shows the polarity of the type of water being used in different crafts. That being said, the
chart
also
shows that every company use a combination of these two types.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, groundwater with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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