The bar chart compares 7 various factories that utilize ground and public water supply in a country. Data are expressed in millions of cubic meters.

The bar chart compares 7 various factories that utilize ground and public water supply in a country. Data are expressed in millions of cubic meters.
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This
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chart
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illustrates and marks the difference between 7 different companies each making use of public and
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. A close look at the
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reveals that most of these factories have opted for ground over public supply. Namely, chemical factories and metal production take up a large portion of
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being used in various industries.
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to these two, paper and textile productions utilize
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eight times more than public supply.
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to the factories mentioned before, foods/drinks and machinery have more use for public supply water than
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by a larger margin. Machinery ,
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, utilizes only a mere 10 million cubic meters of
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as opposed to the hundreds of public
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.
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, the
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shows the polarity of the type of water being used in different crafts. That being said, the
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also
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shows that every company use a combination of these two types.
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