The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate information about full-time and part-time female and male
students
in China in four different periods at 10-year
interval
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. From an
overall
perspective, the number of permanent
students
decrease
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throughout these years for both genders. Comparison between semi-permanent
students
and permanent ones showed that there were
significant
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farther for these two for both genders. Looking in more detail for permanent
students
, women’s tendency towards full-time education was higher than men’s
at
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first
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the first
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year. The initial number of full-time female
students
was approximately 1200 and
then
, declined near to 1100 before again decreasing to 1000 and
finally
reached under 1000. In comparison with female
students
, male learners’ preferences presented a dramatic decline from 1200 to over 500. Moving to part-time learners,
female
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the female
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gender had
fluctuating
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a fluctuating
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pattern which could be considered as a steady trend at around 200,
while
male learners plumed throughout the years; in a way that it reached near zero. In comparison with full-time pupils, the number of part-time
students
was remarkably low for both genders in a way that
full-time
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the full-time
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education approach was over 500,
however
, part-time one was under 250.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Further education
  • Full-time study
  • Part-time study
  • Trends
  • Participation
  • Distribution
  • Disparities
  • Proportions
  • Growth
  • Policy changes
  • Cultural shifts
  • Gender equity
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