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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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Firstly
,
this
 pie chart gives information regarding below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.
This
tablo
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table
 has 4 categories. These are ‘Local male, Non-local male, Local female,
Non- local
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Non-local
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 female’.
Secondly
, when we look at the panel Local
male
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males
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 had 44% in 2001 and 38%
2010
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. After that Local
famale
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families
 had 43% in 2001 and 35% in 2010. Both Local
male
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males
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 and Local
female
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females
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almost
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same
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 rate.
Also
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 2010 is more intense than 2001.
Furthermore
 total
had
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 38.849 in 2001 and 54.081 in 2010.
As a
result
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generally
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 16% increased. Taking everything into account the two panels are close to each other. All in all, the diagram which is above mentioned describes selecting and reporting the main features, and
make
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 comparisons where relevant.
Also
 Local research student and international research
student’s
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 rates. From my point of
view
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view,
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 Local had 73% in 2010. Local was low.
Nonetheless
, 2010 had higher.
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