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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

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The plans reveal the future redevelopment of a site of an airport by next year.
Overall
, there will be a major construction regarding
of
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the number of
gates
, and the walkway path will be transformed into
sky
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a sky
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 train. It will
also
built
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 a variety of different facilities
such
 as bag drop, ATM, and car hire.
First
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 transformation that we can see is there will be changes in terms of the
gates
. In the future, there will be a total of 18
gates
, the
gates
 will form a Y-shape with a sky train replacing the current walkway.
In next
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 year, there will be shops built
infront
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in front
 of the security passport control and they will
also
moving
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move
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 the check-in place to the east side of the departures area and
adding
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 the bag drop place there. In
arrivals
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the arrivals
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 area, a place for hiring cars will be added
in
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 the east side of the arrivals building. There will
also
a
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new ATM next to the cafe, just before the passport control customs.
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introduction conclusion present
Make sure to include a conclusion to summarize the main points and provide closure.
clear comprehensive ideas
Some grammatical errors and awkward phrasings are present. Consider proofread to smooth out sentences and improve clarity.
supported main points
Provide more detailed comparisons between the current and future states of the airport to strengthen your analysis.
introduction conclusion present
The essay presents a clear overview of the current and future states of the airport.
complete response
The essay effectively identifies key changes in airport facilities, such as the introduction of a sky train and new shops.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • terminal
  • car park
  • runways
  • redevelopment
  • proposed changes
  • expanded terminals
  • new gates
  • additional parking
  • amenities
  • navigation
  • environmental impact
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • traffic congestion
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