The charts illustrate information about attend proportion in dance classes that separate 3 classes and age.

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, most of

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dance

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the dance

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classes

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are located in private studios. And

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young people tend to participate

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dance

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club about ballet, older people tend to play modern

dance

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. Private studios are

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location that

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classes

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are chose

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at 48%. And second

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place to learn

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is school halls at 24%.

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of Colleague-based studios is worst at 10%. In the types of

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classes

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, under

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11 years old, ballet

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over 600

students

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learn was

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popular

dance

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Then

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second popular

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is tap.

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one is modern

dance

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. Around 300

students

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participate in modern

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classes

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students

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the students

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who

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aged from 11 to 16 play modern

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which

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with

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over 500

students

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play

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playing

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modern

dance

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. Tap

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is similar proportion in two groups. The worst popular

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was ballet

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around 300

students

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participate

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in it

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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142 words

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