The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of film from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of film from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart illustrates data on
rentals
and
sales
from a store each year from 2002 until 2011.Analyzing four categories
Rentals
, VHS
sales
, DVD
sales
and Blu-ray
sales
.
Firstly
,
rentals
along with
VHS
sales
have shown a significant decrease.In fact, renting films in 2002 was quite popular with 185.000
rentals
in a year!
However
, it had a constant decline since
then
until the very
last
stage with only 55.000.
Similarly
, VHS
sales
had dropped, despite, the decline being significantly worse, as they died down completely in 2006.
On the other hand
, Blu-ray
sales
had risen vertiginously since 2007 were they were first ever sold, until 2011.
Lastly
, DVD
sales
had a more variable trend. In fact, they had started growing from the beginning of the period in
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until 2007 when they had an astonishing peak at 215.000 annual
sales
.Afterwards, it has slightly worsened, arriving at roughly 180.000
at the end
of
last
year.
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