The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of film from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given chart illustrates data on

rentals

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and

sales

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from a store each year from 2002 until 2011.Analyzing four categories

Rentals

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, VHS

sales

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, DVD

sales

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and Blu-ray

sales

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Firstly

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rentals

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along with

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VHS

sales

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have shown a significant decrease.In fact, renting films in 2002 was quite popular with 185.000

rentals

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in a year!

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, it had a constant decline since

then

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until the very

last

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stage with only 55.000.

Similarly

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, VHS

sales

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had dropped, despite, the decline being significantly worse, as they died down completely in 2006.

On the other hand

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, Blu-ray

sales

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had risen vertiginously since 2007 were they were first ever sold, until 2011.

Lastly

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, DVD

sales

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had a more variable trend. In fact, they had started growing from the beginning of the period in

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until 2007 when they had an astonishing peak at 215.000 annual

sales

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.Afterwards, it has slightly worsened, arriving at roughly 180.000

at the end

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last

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year.

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