The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of film from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart illustrates data on
rentals
and sales
from a store each year from 2002 until 2011.Analyzing four categories Rentals
, VHS sales
, DVD sales
and Blu-ray sales
.
Firstly
, rentals
along with
VHS sales
have shown a significant decrease.In fact, renting films in 2002 was quite popular with 185.000 rentals
in a year!However
, it had a constant decline since then
until the very last
stage with only 55.000.Similarly
, VHS sales
had dropped, despite, the decline being significantly worse, as they died down completely in 2006.On the other hand
, Blu-ray sales
had risen vertiginously since 2007 were they were first ever sold, until 2011.
Lastly
, DVD sales
had a more variable trend. In fact, they had started growing from the beginning of the period in exam
until 2007 when they had an astonishing peak at 215.000 annual Add an article
the exam
sales
.Afterwards, it has slightly worsened, arriving at roughly 180.000 at the end
of last
year.Submitted by alessandro.talese on
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