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Many students around the world are not choosing science subject at university? What are the reasons for this? What affects will this have on society?

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It cannot be denied that
students
 think that
science
 is one of the most difficult subjects to study at universities worldwide.
This
 has made most
students
 not choose
this
 subject as a major when choosing a university.
However
, some
students
 are willing to take
science
 as their major in university.
This
 essay will explain the reason why
such
 things occur.
Besides
 mathematics,
science
 has been considered
as
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one of the most difficult subjects learned at school. Not all of the
students
 have an interest in learning
science
 because they
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lack of interest
  • Perceived difficulty
  • Career opportunities
  • Rigorous coursework
  • Scientific theory
  • Uninspiring teachers
  • Outdated teaching methods
  • Cultural influences
  • Societal beliefs
  • Stereotypes
  • Financial constraints
  • Higher education
  • Prohibitive cost
  • Real-world applications
  • Enthusiasm for the subject
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