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The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates important information on the demographics ( population,
GDP
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 per capita, and average
life
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expectancy
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) of four nations (
China
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, Russia, the
USA
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, and the
UK
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).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 each country topped in one demographic
China
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 has the highest
number
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 of population,
while
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 the
USA
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 has the largest
number
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 in
GDP
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,
whereas
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 the
UK
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 has the biggest
number
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 of average
life
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expectancy
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.
To begin
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 with,
China
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 has the biggest
number
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 of people which is around 1,357,000,000
whereas
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 the
UK
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 has the least
number
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 of population which is 64,937,000. In terms of
GDP
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USA
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 has the largest
number
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 of money comprising 53,681$
on the other hand
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,
China
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 has the lowest
GDP
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 around 6,807. In terms of average
life
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expectancy
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UK
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 has the highest
life
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expectancy
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 around 81,5 ,
while
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 the
USA
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 has the lowest rate of
life
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expectancy
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 which is around 69.2.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, life, expectancy, china, usa, uk, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic metrics
  • age distribution
  • urbanization levels
  • population growth rates
  • life expectancy
  • birth rates
  • immigration policies
  • economic development
  • geographical size
  • historical factors
  • health care systems
  • infrastructure
  • quality of life
  • proportion
  • population size
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