The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the maps demonstrate that changes have occurred in
central
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library
between 2 decades ago and today.
as
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we see tables and chairs are demolished
furthermore
some changes
had
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happened that in the following
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it
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will be
remarked
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. computer part which contains CDs, videos, and computer games was renovated
to
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an
area
for storytelling
competition
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, children's fiction books
are
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also
moved to
this
part from the right top of the
library
due to
these reasons
this
area
made
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bigger in comparison with past ,
on the other
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computer room has relocated to the left bottom of the central
library
instead
of reading room that contains newspapers and magazine.
although
the enquiry desk was broken down and
instead
of that a cafe is made,
however
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they relocated information desk to right-middle of the
library
next to self-service machines. it is good to know that
adult
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fiction books
area
is replaced with
adult
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the adult
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non-fiction books
area
and the
library
have
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vacancy
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of
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adult's
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non-fiction
book
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books
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.
to sum up
, in these years the
library
was
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changed a lot
due to
renovation that
include
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, relocation and
broken
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breaking
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down
for
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to
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give
a
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best experience to people who decide to go there.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, instead".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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