The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the maps demonstrate that changes have occurred in
central
Add an article
the central
library
between 2 decades ago and today. as
we see tables and chairs are demolished Capitalize word
As
furthermore
some changes had
happened that in the following Wrong verb form
have
essay
Add a comma
essay,
it
will be Correct pronoun usage
apply
remarked
.
computer part which contains CDs, videos, and computer games was renovated Verb problem
noted
to
an Change preposition
into
area
for storytelling competition
, children's fiction books Fix the agreement mistake
competitions
are
Wrong verb form
were
also
moved to this
part from the right top of the library
due to
these reasons this
area
made
bigger in comparison with past , Add a missing verb
was made
on the other
hand
computer room has relocated to the left bottom of the central Add the comma(s)
hand,
library
instead
of reading room that contains newspapers and magazine. although
the enquiry desk was broken down and instead
of that a cafe is made, however
they relocated information desk to right-middle of the Add the comma(s)
however,
library
next to self-service machines. it is good to know that adult
fiction books Correct article usage
the adult
area
is replaced with adult
non-fiction books Correct article usage
the adult
area
and the library
have
Change the verb form
has
vacancy
Fix the agreement mistake
vacancies
of
Change preposition
for
adult's
non-fiction Change noun form
adult
book
.
Fix the agreement mistake
books
to sum up
, in these years the library
was
changed a lot Verb problem
has
due to
renovation that include
, relocation and Change the verb form
includes
broken
down Wrong verb form
breaking
for
give Change preposition
to
a
best experience to people who decide to go there.Change the article
the
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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