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The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied bar charts indicate various projects for generation by sector in the world over a twenty-year period in the future. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest percentage of
projections
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be services
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.
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, producers will not tend to provide a projection for agriculture over the period. In 2040, the projected
production
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 by sector for services will be as popular as in 2060 at 40% and 41%, respectively. (Which are the highest
amount
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 of
projections
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 over the period).
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, the percentage of projection for manufacturing in the world
production
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 in 2040 is going to be as many as in 2060 at 31% and a third (33%), respectively.
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, the
amount
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 of agriculture
projections
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 for global
production
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 by sector will be 4% in 2040, just ahead of 2060 at %1. (Which is the lowest
amount
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 of
projections
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 over the whole year).
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, the
amount
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 of materials projected
production
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 will
accounts
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3
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% and 4% in 2040 and 2060, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words projections, production, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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