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The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making Diem Thong Nhat matches Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making Diem Thong Nhat matches Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The flow chart illustrates the stages and equipment used for producing Diem Thong Nhat matches. 
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there are ten distinct stages illustrated in the process, commencing with
peeler
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the peeler
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 of
log
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the log
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 and ending with
packing
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the packing
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 area before
final
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the final
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 Thong Nhat matches.
To begin
, the blade is used for
log
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a log
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 of
peeler
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the peeler
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 and veneer before are chopped
to
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into
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 small pieces. These chopped fragments are collected and socked in
ammonium
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an ammonium
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 phosphate tank.
Following
this
, start
for
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drying
of
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them before
start
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 of
next
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the next
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 step.
Then
, these dried pieces are
hopper
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hopped
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 by
blower
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the blower
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 machine, and it will follow the metal duct after
it
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that
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 these materials are stored inside the storage area. In the next step, these are filtered and
insert
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it
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apply
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in the inserter to
final
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 stage of
perforated
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the perforated
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 steel belt. Drying area with various types of liquid, paraffin wax, based chemicals and tip chemicals
then
 are packaged to eventually Thong Nhat matches. Having
of
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completed all these steps,
a matches
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matches
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 will
produce
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be produced
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.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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