IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5

You have a friend who lives in a different country. You will organise a party soon and have thought to use a foreign recipe. Write a letter to the friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. In your letter, tell your friend about the party ask for the recipe explain why you need the recipe from his/her country

#friend #lives #country #organise #party #recipe
Dear Sim, I hope
this
 message finds you well.
Its
Replace the word
It's
It is
show examples
 been ages
we
Correct word choice
since we
show examples
have
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
met, when are you planning to visit your
country
? Actually next month, I am throwing
party
Add an article
a party
show examples
 and I want to ask
the
Change preposition
about the
show examples
 recipe
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
 your
country
's signature dish. In October,
its
Replace the word
it's
it is
show examples
 my third anniversary and I am planning
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
to celebrate it in
different
Add an article
a different
show examples
 style. Every time I choose to go out with family, but
this
 time I want a party at home. The theme of
party
Add an article
the party
show examples
 will be very unique so, everyone will dress up
like
Change preposition
in
show examples
 different
country
's famous clothes.
By
Change preposition
With
show examples
this
 idea, I thought
to make
Change preposition
of making
show examples
 the food of all different countries and I know in your
country
 parmesan chicken is very famous.If possible can you give me a recipe
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
this
 dish
.
Change the punctuation
?
show examples
Beacuse
Correct your spelling
Because
 when I came to visit you
last
 year, I tried
first
Change the article
the first
show examples
 time and it was so delicious.
As well as
Rephrase
Also
show examples
, I am not
good
Correct article usage
a good
show examples
 cook as you know so it will be a great favour if you can help me, as you are working in
very
Add an article
a very
show examples
 popular restaurant where
everyday
Replace the word
every day
show examples
 you
are making
Wrong verb form
make
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
parmesan chicken. I hope you
to
Fix the infinitive
apply
show examples
hear back soon.
Your
Correct the word
Yours
show examples
 faithfully Sum
Submitted by kaursaijbir on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Try to maintain a consistent tense throughout the letter to improve fluency and coherence.
task achievement
Provide more specific details about the party, such as the number of guests, to make your request clearer.
greeting and closing
Include a more structured closing, such as a wish or hope related to the recipe or the party, to leave a lasting impression.
task achievement
The letter covers all of the points required in the task prompt.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is friendly and appropriate for a letter to a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: