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Some people think that it is a waste of time for high school students to study literature, such as novels and poems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Schools
 are the Mecca for education
various
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 subjects and equipping diverse
skills
. Recently, it has been a topic of discussion whether teaching
literature
 at school is vital for
students
 or not.
Opponent
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Opponents
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 believe that there are other important lessons to educate and
literature
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that literature
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 should not be included in school syllabus,
however
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 I believe
totally
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 opposite and
this
 essay will discuss my reasons for
this
 It is universally acknowledged that
schools
 are the first stage of entering to community where pupils learn numerous lessons. As a first social place, studying myths and legends is far from just a hobby and novel; it helps
students
 to learn their country’s history and investigate the ancient culture which is necessary for all nations. Teaching history through stories is an efficient way rather than just educating dates and ancient periods and
occurrence
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. In Iran’s
schools
,
for example
, I remember there were numerous stories and poems about prominent Iranian writers and their lives of which I have learnt from them more than other historical books.
On the other hand
, the benefits of
literature
 are not
tangible
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 as
that
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those
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 of math and physics. To put it differently, at
the
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first insight, it is considered that studying tales is just for fun and joy,
however
, it improves writing and reading
skills
 which are really important for every educated student; and it is impossible to flourish
students
 with them in math or other classes
due to
 some especial activities performed.
For example
, activities involved in every
literature
 class are reading loudly and writing an essay about different subjects
such
 as summer. These activities are helpful for
students
 to read fluently and write different texts even an email for a job. In conclusion,
schools
 are crucial regions to teach
students
 diverse curriculums. It is believed that focusing solely on numerical
skills
 is not adequate for them
due to
 the necessity of other
skills
 which could be taught in
literature
 class.
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