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some people say that the environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People held different views about whether the
loss
 of certain
species
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 fauna and flora is more important or
other
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whether other
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 environmental
problems
 are more urgent.
Although
,
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 there are serious
agruments
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arguments
in
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 both sides I believe there are more important
problems
such
 as global warming that inlfuents directly humanity in several ways,
as well as
,
species
 of plants and animals.
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 essay
demonstates
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demonstrates
firstly
 the
impotance
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importance
 of natural diversity and
consequent
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 results of
loss
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the loss
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this
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 diversity followed by an analysis of global warming from other environmental
problems
 and how it
effects
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on
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both humanity and other life forms.
To begin
 with, the
loss
 of particular
species
 of plants and animals is
more
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 serious problem than it is concerned by most people.
Because of a
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 decrease in
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the differency
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differency
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difference
differences
 of life forms leads to total environmental disbalance.
In other words
, the
extinct
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 of one certain kind of plant or animal means the
loss
 of the step in
natural
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the natural
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 chain, and
as a result
 of
this
 several other
species
' food resource or
live
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environment
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 is destroyed. Regarding
to
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other vital
environment
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environmental
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problems
, global warming is one of
most
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dengarous
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dangerous
them
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that both effects directly expectancy of humanity and
leads
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 to
the
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 significant decrease in
number
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 of wild nature. It is undoubtedly true that global warming is becoming sharper at an increasing rate and creates
the
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deep contrasts between seasons.
For example
,
according to
 the investigation of Colombia University in 2021, in the USA and Canada
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frecuancy
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frequency
 of floods has increased 1.8 times
then
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than
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 the
last
 2 decades. The base on
this
 number it is seeable that agriculture was damaged more by weather
canditions
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conditions
 and
hence
the
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food
insureance
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insurance
 is in
more
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a more
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 perilous situation across the globe.
Furthermore
, the
loss
 of
species
 of wild nature
also
arise
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 from forest fear which
the
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 result of global warming. In conclusion,
extinct
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 of certain
species
is
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more
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a more
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 alert issue as
explaned
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explained
 above,
however
, there are more serious ecological situations
such
 as global warming which affect the entire ecosystems including humans, and I think to
priotize
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prioritize
 other environmental
problems
' solves could help to cope with extinct of particular
species
 and maximize future secure of the whole wild world.
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, helping to frame the discussion effectively.
task achievement
You addressed both views on the topic, providing a balanced discussion before presenting your own opinion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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