some people say that the environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People held different views about whether the
loss
of certain species
in
fauna and flora is more important or Change preposition
of
other
environmental Correct word choice
whether other
problems
are more urgent. Although
,
there are serious Remove the comma
apply
agruments
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arguments
in
both sides I believe there are more important Change preposition
on
problems
such
as global warming that inlfuents directly humanity in several ways, as well as
, species
of plants and animals. This
essay demonstates
Correct your spelling
demonstrates
firstly
the impotance
of natural diversity and Correct your spelling
importance
consequent
results of Correct article usage
the consequent
loss
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the loss
this
diversity followed by an analysis of global warming from other environmental Change preposition
of this
problems
and how it effects
Correct your spelling
affects
on
both humanity and other life forms.
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apply
To begin
with, the loss
of particular species
of plants and animals is more
serious problem than it is concerned by most people. Add an article
a more
Because of a
decrease in Change preposition
A
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the differency
differency
of life forms leads to total environmental disbalance. Correct your spelling
difference
differences
In other words
, the extinct
of one certain kind of plant or animal means the Replace the word
extinction
loss
of the step in natural
chain, and Add an article
the natural
as a result
of this
several other species
' food resource or live
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living
environment
is destroyed.
Regarding Fix the agreement mistake
environments
to
other vital Remove the preposition
apply
environment
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environmental
problems
, global warming is one of most
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the most
dengarous
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dangerous
them
that both effects directly expectancy of humanity and Correct pronoun usage
apply
leads
to Correct subject-verb agreement
lead
the
significant decrease in Correct article usage
a
number
of wild nature. It is undoubtedly true that global warming is becoming sharper at an increasing rate and creates Change the article
a number
the number
the
deep contrasts between seasons. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, according to
the investigation of Colombia University in 2021, in the USA and CanadaAdd a comma
,
frecuancy
of floods has increased 1.8 times Correct your spelling
frequency
then
the Correct your spelling
than
last
2 decades. The base on this
number it is seeable that agriculture was damaged more by weather canditions
and Correct your spelling
conditions
hence
the
food Correct article usage
apply
insureance
is in Correct your spelling
insurance
more
perilous situation across the globe. Correct article usage
a more
Furthermore
, the loss
of species
of wild nature also
arise
from forest fear which Change the verb form
arises
the
result of global warming.
In conclusion, Add a missing verb
is the
extinct
of certain Correct article usage
the extinct
species
is
Change the verb form
are
more
alert issue as Add an article
a more
the more
explaned
above, Correct your spelling
explained
however
, there are more serious ecological situations such
as global warming which affect the entire ecosystems including humans, and I think to priotize
other environmental Correct your spelling
prioritize
problems
' solves could help to cope with extinct of particular species
and maximize future secure of the whole wild world.Submitted by i.nureddinn on
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