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Task 1: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart describes a trend
of
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 the duration of telephone calls in the UK based on different three categories from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
, all categories had
the
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growing trends in
years
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, except
local
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the local
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calls'
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 category.
Firstly
, most
of
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people chose local calls to communicate
each
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 other, as the local calls had the longest duration among other categories. The
local
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number of local
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 calls had
been
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increased
from
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 1995 and reached
its
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their
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 peak with 90
billion
minutes
 in 1999
,
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 before it started to decrease until it reached around 70
billion
minutes
 in 2002. Meanwhile, national and international calls had a positive demand, as it started from not more than 40
billion
minutes
 in calls until it grew 1.5 times more with approximately 60
billion
minutes
 in 2002.
Furthermore
, mobile calls had a massive demand increment as the duration of mobile calls was not more than 10
billion
minutes
 in 1995 but it increased significantly by reaching almost 50
billion
minutes
 of calls in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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