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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps of Porth Harbour
indicates
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 the differences between
in
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2000 and today. First of all,
at
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on
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 the northeast side, there was only
one
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 dock in 2001 but another dock is built in today's harbour map. The second difference is
that
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changing the location of
Marina
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the Marina
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 private
yachts
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 to the fishing
boats
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place
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. In 2000, Marina private
yachts
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was
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were
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 located in the southeast and
fishing
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the fishing
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boats
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boats'
boat's
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place
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was
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were
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 in front of Marian private
yachts
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.
However
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, now, the location where Marian private
yachts
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was
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 located is changed to the fishing
boats
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place
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. The third
one
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 is that there was only
one
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showers
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shower
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 and
toilets
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toilet
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 which was close to
Marina
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the Marina
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 private yacht and car park. Nowadays, there are two showers & toilets. The new
one
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 is located
in
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apply
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beside of car park. The fourth gap is that the
place
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 where
unused
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the unused
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 castle has
became
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become
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to
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a hotel. And there wasn't a load between
castle
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Castle
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 and Road to
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a lifeboat
the lifeboat
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lifeboat
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Lifeboat
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 in 2000.
In now
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Now
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, there is a new load connected to
lifeboat
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the lifeboat
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 load.
And the
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The
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 beach was public yet, after changing to the hotel, the beach is
private
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a private
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 beach for the hotel.
Besides
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, in 2000,there was
the
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an
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 empty
place
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 between fishing
boats
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 and
lifeboat
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lifeboats
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.
Whereas
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, now, there are cafes & shops.
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introduction conclusion present
Your essay would benefit from a clear introduction and conclusion. Think of them as the opening and closing frames of your story.
coherence
Try to avoid repeating similar phrases. For example, the phrase ‘Marina private yachts’ appears multiple times. Try using synonyms or varying sentence structures to avoid redundancy.
supported main points
Support your comparisons with more details and specific examples. For instance, instead of saying ‘Nowadays, there are two showers & toilets,’ you could mention ‘Two shower and toilet facilities are now in convenient locations, one of which is adjacent to the car park.’
clear comprehensive ideas
You have a good grasp of comparing different points in time and noting significant changes. This is especially evident when you discuss the relocation of the marina private yachts and fishing boats.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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