The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps of Porth Harbour
indicates
the differences between Correct subject-verb agreement
indicate
in
2000 and today.
First of all, Change preposition
apply
at
the northeast side, there was only Change preposition
on
one
dock in 2001 but another dock is built in today's harbour map.
The second difference is that
changing the location of Correct word choice
apply
Marina
private Correct article usage
the Marina
yachts
to the fishing boats
place
. In 2000, Marina private yachts
was
located in the southeast and Change the verb form
were
fishing
Correct article usage
the fishing
boats
Change noun form
boats'
boat's
place
was
in front of Marian private Correct subject-verb agreement
were
yachts
. However
, now, the location where Marian private yachts
was
located is changed to the fishing Change the verb form
were
boats
place
.
The third one
is that there was only one
showers
and Change to a singular noun
shower
toilets
which was close to Fix the agreement mistake
toilet
Marina
private yacht and car park. Nowadays, there are two showers & toilets. The new Correct article usage
the Marina
one
is located in
beside of car park.
The fourth gap is that the Change preposition
apply
place
where unused
castle has Correct article usage
the unused
became
Wrong verb form
become
to
a hotel. And there wasn't a load between Change preposition
apply
castle
and Road to Capitalize word
Castle
Add an article
a lifeboat
the lifeboat
lifeboat
in 2000. Capitalize word
Lifeboat
In now
, there is a new load connected to Change preposition
Now
lifeboat
load. Correct article usage
the lifeboat
And the
beach was public yet, after changing to the hotel, the beach is Correct word choice
The
private
beach for the hotel.
Add an article
a private
Besides
, in 2000,there was the
empty Correct article usage
an
place
between fishing boats
and lifeboat
. Fix the agreement mistake
lifeboats
Whereas
, now, there are cafes & shops.Submitted by lizehua041210 on
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Try to avoid repeating similar phrases. For example, the phrase ‘Marina private yachts’ appears multiple times. Try using synonyms or varying sentence structures to avoid redundancy.
supported main points
Support your comparisons with more details and specific examples. For instance, instead of saying ‘Nowadays, there are two showers & toilets,’ you could mention ‘Two shower and toilet facilities are now in convenient locations, one of which is adjacent to the car park.’
clear comprehensive ideas
You have a good grasp of comparing different points in time and noting significant changes. This is especially evident when you discuss the relocation of the marina private yachts and fishing boats.
Fully explain your ideas
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