The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The chart illustrates data about the
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of one country’s exports in different categories over a two-year period from 2015 to 2016.
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,what stands out from the graph is that all of the categories witnessed an increase except one of them, Gems and jewellery which decreased in the
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of exports. Looking at the details, as regards the products it can be seen that Petroleum products and Engineered goods have the biggest share among others and both of them have a
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of over 60
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dollars.
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,the percentages for them grow by 3 and 8.5
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respectively.
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,Textiles had the lowest
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among other exported products and goods.
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However
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there was a rise in the figure and it went from over 20
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to more than 30
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dollars which was a dramatic fifteen per cent change that makes it the largest increase between exported goods.
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the only figure that went down was for Gems and jewellery which decreased by 5.18 per cent to reach nearly 40
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dollars.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words value, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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