Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Some suggest the most effective way of solving rising
traffic
and
pollution
issues would be raising the
price
of
petrol
. I,
however
, do not share the same view as I believe issues around
traffic
and
pollution
can be addressed in more sensible ways. In my view, an increase in
petrol
price
may not be the answer to concerns over
traffic
and
pollution
. From an economic standpoint, a change in
petrol
price
is offset by today’s improving living standards. People generally make a better living today than in the past
due to
the booming world economy, so they would for the most part be affected by expensive gas prices. There is
also
social
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component to consider. Not only is
car
ownership seen as a means of travelling, but
also
as an indication of
individual’s
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social ranking. Seeing as people tend to attach considerable social significance to their personal
vehicle
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vehicles
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, attempts to discourage them
to minimize
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their
car
use through increased fuel prices are likely to fail. Since higher
petrol
prices are not the most optimal solution, it is important to consider some alternative methods of tackling
traffic
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problem and its impact on air quality. One
such
measure would be
car
-pooling.
This
so-called
car sharing
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scheme can slash
traffic
volume and the release of pollutants into the air as
car
use efficiency could be maximized. To put it into perspective, rather than have every
traveler
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travel alone, multiple commuters could be transported in one
vehicle
. What makes
this
idea more appealing than public transport is access to relatively more space and conveniences
such
as air-conditioning.
Additionally
,
government
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should make cars less affordable through rigorous taxes and tariffs.
This
added cost of purchasing a personal
vehicle
would discourage
car
ownership in the first place,
hence
curbing/curtailing
traffic
and
pollution
levels. In conclusion, improved living standards and
social
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aspect of owning a
car
are why increasing the
price
of fuel may not
the
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best solution to
traffic
and
pollution
problems.
Instead
, people should be encouraged to share their personal
vehicle
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through
car
-pooling systems or discouraged
to own
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a
car
by imposing levies on cars.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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