You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email -Give detail of the purchase -Desribe the problem -Explain why you need a replacement urgently.

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing

this

letter to inform you about my online purchase from your website, which

are

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not as great as I thought. I have ordered a dress with matching jewellery

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and, handbag

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handbag

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a handbag

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as well. Let me explain in detail, the

color

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colour

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dress

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the dress

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is not as represented in the picture,

also

the size is too big for me.

Althought

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Although

, the jewellery is great with quality and everything,

but

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the handbag has some zipper damage,

that

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which

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made me feel so bad. I want you to consider my problem and make prompt replacement of dress

as well as

handbag. I have to leave for my

brothers

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brother's

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wedding next week, so

its

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really urgent for me. Thank you

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Include specific details such as order number, purchase date, and product IDs to make your letter more precise.

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Consider revising for small grammatical mistakes and rephrasing for clarity. For instance: 'which are not as great as I thought' could be 'which did not meet my expectations'.

coherence cohesion

Try to use linking words like 'Furthermore', 'However', etc., to enhance the flow between sentences and paragraphs.

coherence cohesion

Good organization in terms of separating the explanation of the problem and the request for action.

suitable writing tone

Clear and polite tone maintained throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

118 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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