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The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, the topic of decreasing working
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 and increasing
weekend
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 has sparked considerable debates. I firmly believe that reducing working hours during
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 and
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weekend
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 can cause
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 enhancement.
On
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 compelling reason for my stance is that individuals will have more energy to
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.
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 can be illustrated by the longer
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 and shorter working
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 means having more leisure
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 to spend.
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, workers can spend
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 extra
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 to recover their energy by some activities
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 as resting at home, sleeping or hanging out with their
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 ones.
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, Finland started to decrease working weeks
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 year and after a year they
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took a questionnaire from their workers about working weeks to see whether it was effective on their
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 or not. As it was expected
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productivity
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 increased and results claimed the main reason for being more productive is having more leisure
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 which underscores
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 point effectively.
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, another significant aspect to consider is mental health.
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highlight
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 the fact that stress can have
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 impact on
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workers'
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productivity
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 at
their
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work
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 and by making
weekends
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 longer and working weeks shorter they will have more
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reduce
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 their anxiety which can
leads
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 to mental health improvement. An example of
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 can be found in my own experience, when I was overwhelmed by stress because I had to
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 the whole
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 as a dentist but by reducing my working
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 and expanding my
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 I could have rest more and
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 my stress decreased and I could focus better at
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therefore
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 my
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 dramatically increased. In conclusion, the arguments presented clearly support my view that decreasing
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the working
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week
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 and expanding
weekends
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 is necessary. By doing so,
works
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productivity
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 will be boosted which can be good for both
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 and society.

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task response
To improve your essay, consider elaborating further on your main points and providing more diverse examples. This would help strengthen your argument and offer greater insight. Additionally, pay attention to minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing for greater clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next by using linking words and phrases more effectively. This will improve the overall flow and make your arguments easier to follow.
task response
Your introduction clearly presents the topic and your stance on the issue. This sets a strong foundation for the rest of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reinforces your viewpoint, providing a strong ending to your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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