Many retired people today are choosing to live in other countries. What are the advantages or disadvantages of this?
In some countries,
the
retired Correct article usage
apply
people
tend to choose to live outside Use synonyms
from
their original country. Obviously, they have their own reasons why they want to live like Change preposition
of
this
. Certainly, there are the merits and drawbacks of Linking Words
this
decision. The merit is they spend their retirement season in a peaceful place and the drawback is they possibly live far away from their whole family.
Linking Words
To begin
with, retired Linking Words
people
want to live in a country that can guarantee safety and comfort. Use synonyms
For example
, in Finland, the government have a program to take care Linking Words
all
of the old Change preposition
of all
people
, Use synonyms
include
the retired ones. Wrong verb form
including
At there
, retired Change preposition
There
people
have a chance to still Use synonyms
productive
even though they are not Add a missing verb
be productive
work
in the office or workplace anymore. Wrong verb form
working
Furthermore
, there Linking Words
is
a Verb problem
apply
place
like residence and Fix the agreement mistake
places
retire
Replace the word
retirement
people
can unlock new skills, Use synonyms
such
as knitting, cooking, gardening, and many else. Not only that, but Linking Words
also
the police will be Linking Words
standby
24/7 to help older and Change preposition
on standby
retire
Wrong verb form
retired
people
. So, it may be a good reason to leave and move to better places.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, Linking Words
retire
Change the form of the verb
retired
people
will leave their loved ones, like family and friends. Use synonyms
For instance
, my friend's Linking Words
grandmother
decided to leave Use synonyms
to
South Korea after she retired and her husband passed away. For around 7 years, she Change preposition
for
can
not meet her Wrong verb form
could
grandmother
and only communicate Use synonyms
by
video calls. She said that she Change preposition
via
is
really Unnecessary verb
apply
miss
her Correct subject-verb agreement
misses
grandmother
. Sometimes, it is a hard moment when she Use synonyms
know
that her Change the verb form
knows
grandmother
got sick because she could not go there to visit. Use synonyms
Thus
, moving to other countries after Linking Words
retire it
Wrong verb form
retirement
is not always be
a good option.
Change the verb form
is not always
To sum up
, there are a lot of retired Linking Words
people
who choose to live in other countries. On Use synonyms
one
hand, they can live in a safe and Correct article usage
the one
comfort
country, but they must leave their big family. Personally, I suggest Replace the word
comfortable
people
Use synonyms
to
think twice before they leave after retirement has come.Remove the particle
apply
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