It is difficult to experience a country fully as a tourist in a hotel. To appreciate and understand a country, a person needs to live there. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days it is harmful to

experience

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country

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country's

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cluture

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culture

as a

tourist

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in a

hotel

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. You need to understand the

country

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living there. I completely agree for many reasons.

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, you need to connect with local

people

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to merge with them.

Secondly

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, living inside the

country

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help

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you to explore it.

Communicate

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with local

people

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is the best way to understand the whole

cluture

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culture

. Local

people

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can teach you about the

principle

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they believe

and

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in and

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other things

such

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as a sense of humor they are used

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to.

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, a study at Harvard University shows that the majority of

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tourist

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tourists

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prefer to stay

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a room with

local

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a local

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family rather than take a

hotel

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room.

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explain

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why most

people

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want to

experience

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the

country

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not as a

tourist

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but as a member of society. Living inside the

country

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give

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you the chance to explore a lot of things

such

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as the best cafe or the best

resturant

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restaurant

restaurants

and find many other options.

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, the

hotel

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give

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you a list

about

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best

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the best

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palces

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places

, but is more joyful when you write your list by yourself. One time when I went to Dubai, I decided to explore the places that

are

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near

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apply

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me, I

find

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found

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the

experince

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experience

very pleasant. Living inside the

country

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give

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you a lot of good memories.

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, being a

tourist

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hotel

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the hotel

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is a difficult

experience

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, you need to be a part of individuals in the

country

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to understand it.

Communicate

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Communicating

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with local

people

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can teach you a lot about

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the country

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country

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country's

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cluture

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culture

Moreover

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, living inside the

country

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can give you a special

experience

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task achievement

**Task Achievement:** While the essay addresses the topic and presents a clear stance, some of the arguments could be further developed. Ensure your points are fully explained and supported by more relevant examples.

coherence cohesion

**Coherence and Cohesion:** The logical structure is mostly clear, but transitions between ideas can be improved. Work on making your paragraphs flow more smoothly from one to the next. Also, for clarity, 'cluture' should be corrected to 'culture' in several places.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are present and support the main points of the essay, which is essential for coherence and cohesion.

task achievement

The essay contains some relevant examples which help illustrate the points being made.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

268 words

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