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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
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The graphic shows global rates of illiteracy for
last
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 year broken down by both gender and area. It is evident that there are great discrepancies in literacy rates
according to
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 both geographic location and sex. What is most striking when looking at the data is the fact that the burden of illiteracy is disproportionately borne by
women
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, wherever they hail from. In almost every region on the planet, the number of
women
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 who cannot read is significantly higher than the number of illiterate
men
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; in East Asia and Oceania,
as well as
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 in the developed countries, it is actually double. Only in Latin America and the Caribbean is there little disparity between the genders in literacy rates. The geographical distribution of education is
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 plain in
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 chart.
Men
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 everywhere are less likely to be unable to read and write than
women
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:
however
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, in some parts of the world, extremely significant segments of the whole population are illiterate.
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 is most marked in South Asia, the Arab states and Sub-Saharan Africa where approximately half of all
women
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 do not possess literacy skills, a lack they share with a third of all
men
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. In East Asia, a fifth of
women
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 and 10% of
men
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 are uneducated in reading and writing.
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 is in stark contrast with developed countries, where the proportion of illiterates is truly marginal, even though the absolute number of
women
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 is
nevertheless
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 double that of
men
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.
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, we can see that there are great differences in educational provision across the globe and that (leaving aside Latin America and the Caribbean) the lion’s share of illiteracy is given to
women
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.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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