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The image below shows the different stages involved in making paper. Write a 150-word report explaining the information given below

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The diagram below illustrates the way of producing
paper
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, there are 7 stages in the flow process , beginning with timber collection, transportation steps and passing throw various processes,
finally
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 being ready for texting and editing. Looking at the details,
firstly
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 the trees are cut and allocated for better transportation,
then
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piece
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pieces
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 of trees are transported to the de-Barking stage, where the timbers are cleaned and softened . In the
last
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 four stages, once the trees
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delivered to the chipping Machine, it is put in 3 vary stages,
as
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apply
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mechanical, chemical pulping and
hydropulper
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hydro pulper
hydropiper
, where each process
are
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 contributed to the screaming and cleaning, for better application of it.
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, as soon as
paper
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have
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 been sent screaming and cleaning,
afterwards
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 it is gone
throw
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through
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paper
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 making machine, where
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paper
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the paper
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would be
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is
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task achievement
The essay needs clearer and more specific details about each stage of the paper-making process. This will improve the thoroughness of your task response.
coherence cohesion
Some sentences are difficult to understand due to grammatical errors. Try to proofread your essay and correct grammar and punctuation mistakes.
coherence cohesion
Use more cohesive devices (e.g., additionally, furthermore) to improve the flow of your essay.
task achievement
Aim for greater clarity and conciseness in each of your points. This will make your ideas easier to understand.
task achievement
The essay provides a general overview of the process, which is good for setting the context.
task achievement
Most of the main stages in the paper-making process are mentioned, showcasing a general understanding.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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